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She smiles,
A slight curve of her cruel lips,
As she walks away,
Leaving another husk of a man in her wake.
Leaving him with only thoughts and memories as useless as her goodbye kiss,
As useless as the "I'm sorry" she whispered sweetly in his ear
Before she sweetly walked out of his life.
Victim number one?
Number three?
Number five?
Number nine?
Or does it really matter?
She is a seducer.
She is a seductress.
She is a succubus.
She is a black widow,
Weaving a web of lust,
Of desire,
Of deceit,
Of lies,
And of love.
Despicable love.
I pity him, her next man,
Her next victim,
Her next prey,
Her next "love."
The next husk of a man that will be left in the wake of her cruel, curving lips.
So...I really like this one :) This was written off of poetry challenge prompt #72: Mischeif Managed. Yeah, how this poem came out of the prompt "Mischief Managed" confused me as well, but no complaints on the product itself :D
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destinymolddesign Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2015
This is an awesome work.  Thank you for sharing.
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Theopenpage Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2014
Like the use of the title in this and the use of the ending line being a slight difference of a repeat of the first line. It makes it seem like her finding victims is cyclic and a motion yet it differes everytime, in some way, with each victim.
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TheOnly-MaKaila Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Very touching, very deep. Makes me pity the next victim as well. I like the use of unnatural language, things I wouldn't expect but are pleasant nonetheless. Reminds me of Framing Hanley's song "Killing Me." :heart:
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nngross Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2010  Hobbyist
Thank you. This is still one of my most personal poems. What do you mean by unnatural language? I'm just curious what you mean by that :) Also, I had never heard of Framing Hanley before, so I looked them up, and I really like them. Thank you for that! :D
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TheOnly-MaKaila Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Oh, no problem. The same happened with me, actually. My friend recommended them and now I'm addicted :XD: By "unnatural" I meant non-cliche. I guess the word "unnatural" wasn't the best way to say it :hmm:
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nngross Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2010  Hobbyist
I now need to download some of their stuff and get to listening a little more :) Unnatural works just fine actually, but non-cliche makes a lot more sense to me. Would you mind letting me know places that stuck out specifically as non-cliche?
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TheOnly-MaKaila Featured By Owner Oct 9, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Things like "succubus" and "web of lust," even "a useless 'I'm sorry'" and "husk of a man." I like it becuase my mind would fill in the blanks as I'm reading the poem with the nearest cliche, but then I'd read it and be pleasantly surprised that the line or phrase is anything but. The poem in general is cliche-defying. Not many write about seductresses anymore, so it's an interesting and refreshing take on love. If you can even call it that. The closest I think I've come to this topic is my own "Pet Vixen," if you care to look it up :D
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nngross Featured By Owner Oct 10, 2010  Hobbyist
Hmmm...you are correct. Very few people take a third person approach to love like that anymore. There is way too much first person angst poetry going on...although I am a culprit of that myself at times :) I'm kind of obsessed with language at times, so I'm glad it finally paid off in something :D
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TheOnly-MaKaila Featured By Owner Oct 11, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
I think we're all guilty of it at some point :XD: but at least we recognize the lack of a third-person point of view :D
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nngross Featured By Owner Oct 11, 2010  Hobbyist
Yes, I'm sure we all are. First person is just soooooo easy though!
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kallia-goldenwings Featured By Owner Jul 17, 2010
this is just amazing
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nngross Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2010  Hobbyist
Thank you very much :D
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NymeeKat Featured By Owner Jul 16, 2010
Oh I like this too!
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nngross Featured By Owner Jul 16, 2010  Hobbyist
Why thank you. This one will hopefully be finding its way into your group... :)
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NymeeKat Featured By Owner Jul 17, 2010
See 'Note' ..as soon as that tag is installed this is the first poem from you I want to see! lol
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nngross Featured By Owner Jul 17, 2010  Hobbyist
Note seen, and contents of note acted upon. Will do, although I'm not sure if I like being ordered around... ;)
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NymeeKat Featured By Owner Jul 17, 2010
LOL Well I promise that is the last dear!
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nngross Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2010  Hobbyist
Well I should hope so... ;)
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NymeeKat Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2010
You're a good sport and an excellent poet, Im happy to hve you at Doctrinaire!
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nngross Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2010  Hobbyist
And thank you oodles for the watch :hug:
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nngross Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2010  Hobbyist
Awwww...you are too kind. My already large ego does not need your compliments...but I do appreciate them...very, very much :dance:
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jayde1313 Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2010
Faved. <3
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nngross Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2010  Hobbyist
Yay! Thank you!
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jayde1313 Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2010
No problem. :3
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cowgirlupbud Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2010   Photographer
This is very cool yet i still dont get how misheif managed came out of this. it is very well constructed and unique
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nngross Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2010  Hobbyist
Yeah, I don't really get it either. Oh well, sometimes stuff just happens right? And thank you :)
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